Monday, May 14, 2012

Is it me?

The sounds of the hospital where many a baby cry,
Sat the recently wed man and his lovely bride shy,
Soon to be parents, no bounds to their joy,
Mother watching me, on the screen enjoy,
He wanted a boy, alas, he could only abide by,
From him an unhappy gasp, from her a contented sigh
Her fingers on the ultrasound, “Beautiful, isn’t she?”
I wonder, is he the one miserable, or maybe, is it me?

Brother plays with a plane, I ask to share,
Turning a deaf ear to me, he takes it to the air,
Sobbing I run to Father, he asks ‘Why do you care..
Why don’t you play with Barbie and braid her hair’,
Mother stands afar, gazing mutely somewhere,
I dream, wish and pray for once, that life be fair,
Even at this tender age, as I am all of three,
I wonder, is he the one unjust, or maybe, is it me?

‘Mother, I want to be a pilot’, I happily announced
‘Did I hear you right or you just mispronounced’,
Father slapped me hard and all but pounced
‘You’ll do as I say or I’ll have you renounced,
How could you even think you could have denounced’,
Brother jumped into the fray, and I was severely trounced,
‘You will have to marry, how dare you disagree’, says he,
I wonder, is he the one unreasonable, or maybe, is it me?

Armed with dreams of love and understanding,
I marry into a family of Father’s choosing,
Wondering if its an end or a new beginning,
I see the continuance of my old self, always abiding
A whole new generation, yet behavior unchanging
He too wants a son, his attitude ever demanding
‘Girls and dogs not allowed’ sounds like his decree,
I wonder, is he the one overpowering, or maybe, is it me?

The sounds of the hospital where many a baby cry,
I shoot looks of despair at my husband, the bad guy,
Conspiring with the doctor, as I meet his eye
‘I told you, if a girl, you’ll have to bid goodbye’
Teardrops run down my cheeks, I choke and wish to die
From me an unhappy gasp, from him a contented sigh
With the passing of time, no longer exists she,
I wonder, is the whole world heartless, or maybe, is it me?



Note: On Mother's Day, this is my first feeble attempt at fictional poetry - because every mother is born a girl. Written in response to a writeup suggestion on the topic "Is it me?" by a fellow blogger BK at WriteupCafe.com and in support of Save a Girl Child. I would love to wish all mothers a very happy Mother's Day except - every day is your day. Love you Mom!


I would love to hear your views!

42 comments:

  1. very nicely written, and very touching. no one will tell that it is a first ballad attempt. joining you to wish all moms a great mother's day every day.

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    1. Thank you Subhorup, though I do think that poetry is not my cup of tea. I have read some beautiful ones that people have put together, they strike a chord deep within. I really admire those guys. Its not easy.

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  2. great ghazal...first attempt and so fine, unbelievable !!

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  3. Excellent Deepa-so touching & not at all a feeble first attempt.

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    1. Thank you Indu. I dont see myself writing more poetry soon but who knows, maybe someday!

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  4. That was really touching.
    I just wish Mothers everywhere have the courage to say 'no' when they must.

    Happy Mother's Day to all mothers. :)

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    1. I agree. I just wish they have the courage and the will to stand up for their rights and against injustice. A lot of women's rights feminists would blame men but I think its up to the lady too to stand up for herself. Sure sometimes circumstances might not make it easy or even possible for them to do so, but if a mother raises her daughter teaching her to stay inferior and subservient for life, she's already doomed.
      Like they say - Be the change that you wish to be in the world.
      To all mothers!

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    1. Honored. Taking a bow! Congratulations on your new found bundle of joy! Loved his welcome home poetry! You write so much poetry, I can never do that!

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  6. Thats too good for a first attempt..you should get some best debut award for this.. :)
    Keep rhyming..you have a good knack for it..

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    1. LOL, Thank you BK :) Good writeup suggestion, set me thinking!

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    1. Thank you Jaish! Very sweet of you!

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  8. Wonderful attempt ... really ...

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    1. Am definitely grateful, glad you liked it!

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  9. Very nice, Deepa and a fine attempt!!!!

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    1. Thank you Bhavana! Kind words :)

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  10. I appreciate the beauty of your work. You know my feelings on the subject already.

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    1. Thank you USP. I do know and salute you for your thoughts on this subject! :)

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  11. Wonderfully penned, Deepa! Loved it :-))
    came here via Rachna's.

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    1. Thank you Uma. That is very sweet of you. Its so inspiring when someone comes across a post due to a fellow blogger's popularity. All the more reason to thank Rachna too! :) She's a wonderful blogger herself. And, am so glad you liked it! Do keep visiting!

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  12. That was wonderful! That didn't seem like a first attempt at poetry. Way to go!

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    1. Thanks Cartic! Unless you count clue couplets put together for Treasure Hunt as poetry, this is truly the first :)

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  13. Beautiful one Deepo... Loved it :) N yea keep writing... if this is first attempt then cant help but look fwd for more n more to come.

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    1. Thank you Aparna :) Hopefully someday some more :)

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  14. Wonderfully written Deepa. Loved it!

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    1. Thanks Horizon :) One more avenue explored. Though I dont think I have it in me to hang around here much longer :) Maybe someday!

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  15. It definitely succeeded in your attempt..it was very moving!!

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    1. Thank you Sakshi. The whole topic does strike a deep chord within us.

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  16. very touchin.... nicely written.... happy writin n keep up ur gud work....

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  17. I dont really understand poetry. I know if I like something though I cant give reasons for it.

    I liked this very much.

    Dagny

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    1. I don't know how I missed responding to this. Thank you Dagny!!! :)

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  18. Do this more often Deepa. How I wish I could write poetry.

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    1. Maybe I should try again! Your words are encouraging :) Thank you!

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