Sunday, August 5, 2012

Karma or a stroke of luck?

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 30; the thirtieth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
A sunset walk along the beach; Juhu.
A sunset walk along the beach
He walked along the beach, barefoot against the setting sun, his limping silhouette casting deep long shadows across the sand. The rusty metal chair kept slipping down his shoulder but he would catch it in the nick of time. The small faded once-white-now-brown cloth bag balanced precariously on his head bulged from all directions, threatening to spill open at every step he took. His aged eyes scanned the crowds mingling around, searching for the perfect target, old or young, educated or not, urban or rural, no preference. Zoning in on a few such likely candidates in his immediate vicinity, he gently lowered the metal chair struggling to open it with his free hand while his other hand held on to the container on his head. In the hot humid climate of Juhu, the back of his shirt stuck to his body and beads of sweat lined his brows. A receding hairline, salt and pepper hair and a thin moustache put him in the early fifties. Having set the chair, he proceeded to lower the basket on his head. Setting it down on the rough brown sand, he untied the frayed ends of the make-shift cloth basket which contained the tools of his trade. Loosely sifting sand with his callussed fingers until wet mud came through, he then arranged on the firm wet patch the belongings of the basket. Four tiny oil containers, a sponge, a pumice stone, a few used dirty towels, a bottle of water, moisturizing lotions. Early fifties and still striving to make ends meet. Being a masseur was all he knew. The only way he could bring home bread for his family of five.

In the distance, enthusiastic tiny tots jumped and skipped in the water, shrieking with delight as they splashed water on each other. Now as he lathered a heavyset man’s back with fragrant oil, his hands and habit took over and his mind was free to roam as he desired. However, lately, all he could think about was paying his little girl’s school related expenses. The government had recently passed a dictate mandating that education be a right for every child. His daughter’s excitement had known no bounds when he and his wife had announced their decision of getting her enrolled in school. She was 12, but this was the first time she would be experiencing school, the school that she had only heard of. Even though tuitions were free, he still had to foot the bills for her uniform, books, stationery and school trip/fund related expenses. He wondered how he would be able to provide for the extra expenditure considering that his clientele hadn’t changed much over the years. His two girls were still attending school and his eldest, his son was working part-time to help him financially. His loyal clients would always come back, but he needed new customers too. With inflation reaching new heights every year, prices of everyday commodities like vegetables and oil, rice and wheat were also rising in leaps and bounds. Half of what he earned had to be paid as a bribe, a weekly hafta - to the local policemen so they would let him work in peace. At the end of the day, he would have no savings.

Aye! This is what I pay you Rs. 35 for? Bloody illiterate!!! Why don’t you go back to Bihar you moron?” The irate voice of his customer jolted him out of his reverie. The seemingly educated man in his thirties, lying supine, started thrashing his hands around trying to get up and his knee-jerk reaction spilled the oil container placed carefully at his side. He let loose a string of expletives. Local Biharis, UPs and the Maharashtrians were constantly at loggerheads and neither side would let go of an opportunity to deride the others. Thankfully the attitude was limited to uneducated folks and not the mass.

Oh! Oh saab, please. Wait for a minute saab. Will give you 10 minutes extra, free saab” pleaded the poor man, quickly trying to collect the flowing oil, trying in vain to get the man to stay. He could not afford to lose another client.

Saala bihaari!” continued the middle-aged man.
I am not a Bihari saab, why do you keep saying that?
UP waala then, what difference does it make? You villagers don’t have any work in your state, so you keep coming here to make Mumbai dirty, why don’t you just do this in your own state!”.
I was born here saab. My father too. We’ve always belonged to Maharashtra, chalo na saab, now spit out your anger saab. I’ll do a free massage for you, you will be relaxed in 10 minutes, no anger no tension saab. Then you bring your friends too saab
Hmmpph, cheap tricks. Do you know who I am? Do you? Saala, you wouldn’t be answering me back if you knew. I am the DIG’s brother, you thief!” said the client, buttoning his shirt and striding away leaving the poor masseur to his oils.
Saab, saab, my money saab? I massaged you for 25 minutes saab. It was almost time saab. Atleast pay me half the price, 15 rupees” he cried out as he limped after the retreating client, but to no avail.

The elderly man limped back slowly to his place, silently weeping on his fate. Minutes ticked away, then an hour too. Evening joggers were finishing their daily rounds and heading back. Groups of elderly ladies finished their evening chats and started dispersing. The shades of orange were now becoming a deep red, soon the sun would fade into the darkness leaving him stranded again with meagre savings and no way out.

Suddenly there was a loud commotion near the water. People started screaming, adults started pulling children away. A few seconds apart, the teeming mob of people at the waterfront had reduced to a handful of intrigued onlookers. No one dared venture in the water to save the drowning man. His head bobbed up and down with the waves and he was ingesting salty water, coughing incessantly. The masseur looked around, there were no policemen in sight, no dogs either, no young determined lads looking to save a life. Making a split second decision, he waded into the waters, swimming into the deep. Panting every few seconds, he second guessed his move. He was no longer as fit as before, no longer young. Yet, he swam, relying on the receding waves to take him close. Clutching the drowning man by the collar, he slowly swam back. The handful of people had now grown in numbers, people crowding to watch the rescue attempt. Video cameras and cell phones were out in plenty, recording the entire event, some cheering him on, some applauding.

The masseur slowly tugged the man onto solid ground, flipping him onto his back wanting to pump water out of his stomach. But his own mind did a double flip as he realized with a start that the man who had just been rescued was the irate client who had cheated him out of his meagre 15 rupees, the man who was now looking up at him through apologetic eyes, as if asking for forgiveness. As the crowd parted, the masseur looked up with tears in his eyes to find the local constable standing by, eyes lowered to the ground, shameful of the act of having stood by and done nothing. He had simply been a witness to the entire incident. In a sudden move of gratitude and loyalty to his job and the DIG obviously, he offered to waive the weekly hafta leading the masseur to fall to his knees, crying tears of joy, taking the Lord’s name and thanking the constable profusely.

The masseur now slowly limped back to the chair that he used for seated massages and flopped down on it. He felt at peace, thankful that something good had come out of the rescue attempt that he had gotten into. He cursed himself for double guessing the noble attempt and attributed his good luck to God and Fate, resolving never to second guess his decisions again. As the sun set on the horizon, he walked back home, a smile on his lips and peace in his heart.
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Credits
Image - Shades of Orange by Harsha Chittar
Courtesy - Curious Dino Photography via www.blogaton.in
Note: This post is an attempt to document some of the hardships faced by local masseurs on Mumbai beaches, facing problems providing for their meagre routine in the midst of bigger problems like corruption, political ire and poverty even as they trudge along day after day striving to make ends meet.
I would love to hear your views!

40 comments:

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    1. Thanks Suresh! It didn't come out as I had expected it to, I was hoping to stretch out the rescue attempt and add some dialogues and more feel to the hafta-waiving but oh well!

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  2. Nice one..the first para especially was very rich, in writing quality terms..I felt he deserved more than a one-week hafta waiver, but then, that's life, correct? :)

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    1. Yeah I know :) See my comment above! :) I started out strong but the feel kind of fizzled out at the end, even I felt so. He did get a complete waiver on the weekly hafta. I said weekly not week :)

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  3. i loved the way you have described the old man in the first para. A very good narrative as well.

    ATB for BAT

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    1. Ditto! The second part starting from the rescue attempt onwards fizzled out. The first part did a good build up but the second moved way too fast! Good learning for the next one!

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  4. I really loved your attention to details. You described in such details that I could almost visualize every scene. And I liked the positive and at the same time pragmatic ending.

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  5. Very good narration Deepa . And I ditto what everyone else said . The first para speaks In volumes of ur writing prowess

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    1. Thanks Jaish. I was planning to anyway, but now am determined to rewrite the second half. Will wait for the BAT voting to end before I do that! :)

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  6. That was such wonderful narration, Deepa. Stroke of luck and karma are one and the same thing, depending upon how you look at it.

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    1. Really? To me karma was always - if you do good, you get good, if you do bad you get bad. But luck was luck, just good or bad regardless of how you are. Of course, karma doesn't seem to playing a role these days!

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  7. Well done Deepa.The old man captured my imagination and so did your narration.

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  8. what an irony life can be
    best wishes for BAT

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    1. Thanks Karan. Am reading all the BAT entries now myself. Best wishes for BAT to you as well!

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  9. I loved your narration. Intense- gripping. You have a way with words. even a predictable story becomes good- when you go about it.

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    1. Thank you Muthu. Do read my in-the-works series Second Chances and The Butterfly Effect if you get a chance. I have a feeling you would enjoy those! Thanks for stopping by!

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  10. This was going very well but then it ended.. Be a bit patient and you will do even better.. By the way, this confused me "He cursed himself for double guessing the noble attempt" I did not see when did he have any doubt about saving the drowning person. I guess it might be the lines where he thought he might be incapable

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    1. Thank you InsanityPersonified! This is what I love about the blogosphere. I had a feeling the end was a bit too fast and abrupt but constructive criticism like your's and the others' up above are what help me confirm it! Yes, it was the part where he felt if he should have waded into the waters or not! I will be rewriting the second part of this once BAT voting completes, do stop by again!

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  11. Good one Deepa !!

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  12. I like it Deepa. Your words are very descriptive. I can relate to this discrimination that you are talking about having lived for two years in Bombay. People hate "bhaiyas" so much that when you address any stranger as "bhaiya"- meaning older brother they get annoyed! I am sorry if I do not visit your blog much. I often confuse your comments as that of my sister's and it is only when she tells me that it was not her I realize it might have been you!!!

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    1. Thank you Meera! Yes, we Indians can complain about other countries indulging in racism. The US folks, Brits, Aussies even but us, Good lord, no - we are a peace loving nation! We do not discriminate on the basis of caste, or religion or mother tongue! I am glad you stopped by. Now that I know you have two blogs, every time I leave a comment there I'll leave an identifying signature so you know its me! Do keep coming back!

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  13. Beautiful attention to detail indeed. Like TF, I could imagine it easily. Well narrated, and a moving story. Good deeds do have their reward, and in this case, the good deed was also selfless. All the best..

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    1. Thank you Leo! Nice to see you here! Do keep coming back!

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  14. Though the end was obvious the way you wove it kept me interested! You are a good story teller!

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    1. Thank you for your kind words Manasa, do keep stopping by!

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  15. You bring about the characterization so powerfully by great narrative. which takes the reader along so effortlessly. The emotional content is full of insight and understanding of human nature...!Great job!

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    1. Thank you for the oodles of appreciation Panchali - I'll need a little time to descend back to reality from the seventh heaven that I am in right now!

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  16. Once again, brilliant piece of work here.. I liked the story and the message! Good luck on BAT

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    1. Thank you Srikanth! Hope to see you here more often!

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  17. omg!! what a post! so vivid, as if it was a motion picture in front of my eyes! kudos Deepa! :)

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  18. This was such a touching story. Beautifully narrated! I loved the detail in your writing and your painted the emotions and their undertones so vividly. This lovely story made my eyes moist and my heart happy.

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    1. Thank you Raj for the extremely flattering appreciation! :)

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  19. Good story. However, I did not understand the part of "the girl going to school for the first time at the age of 12". Maybe, I need to re-read.

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    1. She had never been to school before because the masseur could never afford the tuition fees. But ever since the RTE act mandated that every child has a right to education regardless of whether or not the parents can afford it, he decided to send her to school. However he still does have the added burden of other school related expenses.

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  20. Brilliant work... I love your narration and I'm glad to read you today.. Keep writing.. All the best..

    Someone is Special

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  21. it all depends how we look at it .. ot me karma and luck are same



    Bikram's

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